I think my strongest piece is my personal analysis with my research paper in close second...because the personal analysis is really an inspirational piece. My whole life i have kept a journal so being able to write as if i were writing in my journal was really fun for me. I also feel i found the perfect person to write the essay on and i think it really helped that i was able to talk to her and ask her my own questions about her struggle and be able to compare them to my own struggles. Because i was able to get on such a deep emotional level i think it really captures the reader and keeps them hooked throughout the whole essay. I do need to work on making it be able to reach to everyone even if they or someone they know has not experienced issues with their weight. If i can accomplish that i feel that piece of writting will truely be effective.
The essay i have had the most trouble with is the mccandless response essay. Although i know my position on what i think of him..it has been hard for me to put it in essay for and really prove why i think he is a hero...I wish i had like three very specific strong points that i could establish to make my point. It would make the essay a lot easier to write but because i just have a vision of why i think he is the way he is i dunno i feel its not as strong as it could be...i know a lot of people are doing this essay and all that i have read of them i feel each one doesnt have very specific points...im at a loss but trying to make it work hahaha
i really like your personal analysis essay. i know we talked about this in class, but i thought it was really cool that you were actually able to interview her, it added a lot to your paper and showed that you really cared about doing a good job.
ReplyDeletei have come across sort of the same problem with the mccandless essay. it really is hard to get specific examples of why he is hero. and it's even harder to find sources. but i felt like your essay is still really good and that you have done a great job working with what you have. when i read this essay of yours, i didn't feel like it was lacking reasons of why he was a hero though. it seemed like you had a lot of things going for you in that paper too. you really are making it work!
I would also agree that your personal analysis essay was really strong. There were a few minor things that could be done to make it even better, but as of now it is a great essay. Like I said before, the one thing that I would change is to try and make it more global so that everyone can connect to it.
ReplyDeleteI have the same troubles with writing the McCandless essay. It is just hard to show your opinion and find really strong examples of it. I think that one way to try and fix that is by maybe finding a really good point, and then tailoring your view around that point. Then you would have strong evidence and it would work towards your essay as well. Other than that there isn't much else to do for that essay.
Good luck with editing the essays!!